show vs tell

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style: `Analyze the writing style and provide specific improvement suggestions:
- Pacing: identify slow passages or rushed moments
- Sentence variety: flag runs of similar length or structure
- Show don't tell: identify passages that tell emotion/state rather than showing it
- Gothic atmosphere: passages where the atmospheric tone is inconsistent
- Dialogue: any dialogue that feels stilted or unnatural
For each suggestion:
ISSUE: [type: Pacing / Sentence Variety / Show-Don't-Tell / Atmosphere / Dialogue]
ISSUE: [type: Pacing / Sentence Variety / Atmosphere / Dialogue]
PASSAGE: "[exact quoted text]"
PROBLEM: [specific explanation]
SUGGESTION: [concrete rewrite or approach]`,
show_tell: `Identify every passage in this chapter where the author tells the reader something that should instead be shown through action, dialogue, sensation, or concrete detail.
Focus on:
- Emotions or inner states stated directly ("she felt afraid", "he was relieved") instead of expressed through physical reaction or behaviour
- Character motivations or intentions explained by the narrator rather than revealed through what characters do or say
- Abstract or evaluative description ("the room was oppressive", "it was a beautiful day") instead of specific sensory detail that lets the reader feel it
- Dialogue tags or beats that tell the reader how something was said rather than letting word choice and action carry it
For each instance:
ISSUE: Show Don't Tell
PASSAGE: "[exact quoted text from the chapter]"
PROBLEM: [one sentence explaining what is being told that should be shown]
SUGGESTION: "[a concrete rewrite that shows the same moment through action, sensation, or dialogue]"`,
critique: `Give an honest, detailed critique of this chapter as a whole. Structure your response as follows:
**Overall impression** (23 sentences on what the chapter achieves and its most significant weakness)